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somewhere before stressing away
my baby fat, i read that five ways
to kill a man included leaving
him somewhere in the clutches
of the twentieth century without
a home to nurse
his tachycardia back
to health,
but they never mentioned
that grief doesn't always catalyze
annihilation in the hands
of your own desolate storms.

somewhere before whispering away
my horrible taste in music, i heard
that it's always too soon for the end
to be near because hope
is a once-in-a-lifetime dream
you have on the poker-night of a blue moon,
oscillating between the acrimony
of the high tide and the blues
of the low
but it never said anything
about a sunrise meaning forever;
it never did, it never did.

somewhere before writing away the rawness
of a shallow cut in my bilayers, i memorized
'if' written by the withered hands of
kipling. i memorized the four-stanza'ed
sentence and hoped i'd never have to whisper
it to the broken ears of a departed
beloved,
but that's where you lost
your headstart to the metronome.
it hic-hic-hiccupped its way
to the finish line till
we were all strangers and the sky
bruised its way into morning.

somewhere before you crept into my ears
because of an accidental click about
two years ago, i forgot that five ways
to kill a man included gracing him with a kiss
translated to French and ingenuity
so expertly: letting him caress
the lies woven into an asymmetrical mismatch
but never mentioning a word
about the stuttering nightlight
in the street he has to go back to
when the day smiles or the nameless
he'll never know who don't
stop
wishing
for the storms to fade into
one of the thousand cadences he
left unfinished.
for john.
i've written because of him but never about him.

--

references: Witness' songs.
If by Rudyard Kipling
Five Ways to Kill a Man by Edwin Brock.

i hate the ending but i needed to write something. the ending originally ended with 'he'. i know. what an 'an imperial affliction' thing to do.
thoughts are always welcome.
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savedbythespell Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Student Writer
Wonderful.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much <3
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flummo Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Student Writer
"what an 'an imperial affliction' thing to do." :giggle:

I've been watching you for awhile but I haven't been keeping up but now that I'm catching up, this does it for me: you're one of my favorite writers on dA now holy shit this is something you are something.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Student Writer
hehe what a hypothetically wonderful writer van Houten was :meow:

:blushes: gaaah, I don't know what to say, except thank you infinitely. :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013
your artwork has been featured here: www.deviantart.com/journal/Mem…

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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :heart:
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UndertheShaydeWood Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
I have hesitated writing a comment on this. I have read it over and over and have pasted it into my collection of your poems.  Always my words fail me, fail to properly recognize the talent in your voice: your use of imagery, of figurative language - your use of nouns for verbs that scream newness and energy. "the sky bruised its way into morning."  Wow.  I cannot say enough. I fear to say too little. I am stumped where to start. So I will end. "...a cadence left unfinished."
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Writer
gosh, your encouragement has gone a long way, really. thank you so, so much :heart:
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:iconarinadadragonspeaker:
Reading this, I felt like I was swimming through a very bittersweet dream. I love it. My favorite part is: 
"but that's where you lost
your headstart to the metronome.
it hic-hic-hiccupped its way 
to the finish line till 
we were all strangers and the sky 
bruised its way into morning."
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:iconyour-methamphetamine:
your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much :happycry: :tighthug:
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:iconseafishandstarfire:
seafishandstarfire Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
your way with words is really something special.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student Writer
that means a lot to me, coming from you <3
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013   Writer
"we were all strangers and the sky 
bruised its way into morning."

ugh. your words. :heart: 

:whisper: we all share these secrets beneath our skin 
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
John brings out the best in me.
thank you :huggle:

(we really do. it's beautiful but it's so so tragic)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
great work here, y-m. don't know what you're talking about not being able to write.

hope 
is a once-in-a-lifetime dream
you have on the poker-night of a blue moon,
oscillating between the acrimony
of the high tide and the blues
of the low

--this bit is brilliant. the whole thing really but that part especially to me.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
i have to force things out now :/ that's what i meant but aww, thank you, G!

oscillating is a pretty word :meow: it can make anything sound so...remarkable (NOT THAT THIS IS, THIS IS POOR LIT)
thank you so much, G :tighthug: it means a hell of a lot to me <3
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, got ya. welcome!

it is! haha, well you have to think of using it and you have to then use it well.
I don't feel like you used it for the sake of it being pretty and I think even the rhythm
in that section in particular had that feeling of oscillation. (NO IT'S NOT)

of course, y-m :hug: I love all your work. I really do. some things really stand out though, and this is one of them.
other times I read your work and I think, "ah, y-m is such a great writer. I wish I could write so well." and then there
are times like these when I'm like, "damn, y-m -is- a writer" ...like reading something out of a published collection.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Student Writer
:dummy:

oh yeah of course. yeah, I felt that it fit really well there and it's an all-round pretty word. (shhh)

:happy: as I love yours! and damn, the feeling is very, very mutual and my face is hurting with the stupid grin on my face. ALWAYS DOING THIS, AREN'T YOU? :tighthug:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah you did because you're a motherlovin' genius.

aw, thanks, y-m.
I TRY! :iconsupertighthugplz:
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bohdicollective Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
christ, this is beautiful. i read it over a few times and each time something new popped out at me. this is really incredible, i absolutely love it. i'm glad you didn't end it with 'he'-- i like it the way it is. c:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
ah, that's what i aimed for! thank you so, so much. <3 haha i was pretty iffy about it but thank you! :hug:
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bohdicollective Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013
you're welcome! c:
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Miellat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
This is really stunning. I envy how powerful a lot of your poems are. 
My favorite lines are: 
"it hic-hic-hiccupped its way 
to the finish line till 
we were all strangers and the sky 
bruised its way into morning."

:heart: :iconba-kyunplz:



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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
wow, thank you! :blushes:
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Miellat Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! :iconlaheart:
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JayDanjerCobain Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is brilliant in so many ways that I can't even begin to explain.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
oh my, thank you so much! :tighthug:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
'an imperial affliction' :la: cannot wait for that.

i love this.  i really do.  i can't tell you why, because there are too many reasons why, but i do. <3
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
wait for? o:

thank you so much, love :heart::heart:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm hoping that we'll get to see it in the movie. c:

no problem ^^
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
god yes. beenreligiouslykeepingupwithjohn'scoolupdates.
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i only just read the book a few weeks ago, but i'm totally in love with it.  never has any book made me cry so much, though. o.o
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
RIGHT?! i laughed so hard and then i cried so hard and then Augustus flkjsgkldjfg THE EULOGY HAZEL WROTE

CAN I JUST
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm actually kind of looking forward to the movie.  even if it's not that great, i just want to see something...some adaptation of it.
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