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he says, "Time heals
everything," and I remember because he
crushes his wrist watch under his heels
as he directs answers into my
winter-battered lungs;
"Success is never giving it
reason to."

"Life," he says, "fancies itself a
generous, well-worded testimonial, brimmed
with lucky dimes and trying times fought
back with 32-yellowed grins
dawned with tax stress and grime." I resign
as he signs a cursive lie into
papers he claims unimportant.
his smiles are a cold
kind of tight-lipped and scarce
with glimpses of unabridged sunlight
when he isn't
careful.

"You're not beautiful," he says, "you're
human and that's about as good as it gets." I
hold in a heart burn,
retorts churning sleepless and shivering under
my bruised, silenced tongue as he
slides two fingers in the flute of my wrist
to check a vitality, ever since been declared
a casualty.
his hands have always been
the Atlantic.
it's choppy and unfinished but I'm trying to write.

(putting this in the "literature" category hurts. I'm sorry)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 19, 2014   General Artist
ZOMGawd this is glorious and you are plain gorgeous, sweetheart! Congratulations on such a splendid piece! :heart:
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locosquirrel Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Fact: This is one of my favorite poems ever. :)
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ApplauseJunkie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, this would sound glorious spoken.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Student Writer
i've been wanting to read it aloud but just haven't found the time.
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aestheteminimalist Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
Great writing, I especially liked the bit about humanity at the very end. Very poignant and universal.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much!
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Writer
the ending oh my god the ending is gold
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
:heart:!!
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effervescent-nothing Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That last stanza has me by the heart man.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
you have me by the heart, missy :heart:
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effervescent-nothing Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: oh you
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
so apparently "choppy and unfinished" equals fucking amazing now
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
hardly! :blushes: thank you, love :heart:
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SophisticatedCleffa Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Writer
This is really good. "Unabridged sunlight" speaks to me on so many different levels - love it
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
thank you!
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lavenderl Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this, even if you do consider it "choppy and unfinished".
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
:tighthug: thank you so much, dear. <3
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Solipsism-Syndrome Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
I'm with lavenderl. We never have accurate appraisals of our own work; we are always either too protective of it or too ungenerous. This really is gorgeous, I'm glad I took a ride on the whim that led me to click on it. :D
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Student Writer
thank you <3
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lavenderl Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure. ^^ Huggle! 
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is absolutely beautiful and i think it is amazing. you are amazing and this is such an incredible poem holy shit??? your talent. i love the poem, all of it, the loose rhyme scheme and the first stanza fuck "crushes his wrist watch under his heels" is such a good line and its so moving i love this?? 
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
you're far too kind! :blushes: thank you SO much <3
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I like the middle stanza best.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
thank you!
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