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my dear landlocked friend,
I--

I must have missed the memo;
do we all
leave warm hearts
behind now? I see,
I see it far clearer now.
they're blotched and inked
and stamped and fixed
on the idea that we
need them.

you can only feed them with
distress signals for so
long. let's disappear
together, let's
talk about needing more
space around our ankles,
our toes, our mouths,
and especially
our ears;

it's not like we asked them
to dampen their own
voices once.
 
for us, my friend, for us,
let us
silence the Melinoe we fed
for more pats-on-the-back
once. let's
scavenge for more thirst
and direction they begged
us for. our egos are stroked
like first-time clubbers and
desert-cracked unloved
lovers.

my dear landlocked friend,
I have
one too many
pats on the back
for you. I have
several pestering
cataracts to remove
from your
seemingly eternal
vacuum of a
chest cavity, but you,

you are far from
ordinary, far
from the unknown,

for I
knew you once

and I wish,
my friend,
I wish some part of you
stirred
every time you told someone
imminently just-as-
unimportant-as-me
that I never
really
did
know you.
we finally see you the way you see yourselves.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Different and a little vague for me. However I enjoyed the feel that this work had to offer and ignoring portions that I was not able to fully comprehend, it was a nice read and the ending was quite interesting.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student Writer
if you had to ignore portions of the poem, your feedback isn't valid. I'd rather accept open minded comments, i believe your time would be spent better with more direct poetry, which you might have noticed wont be found anywhere near my gallery. thank you.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome and thank you for your suggestion.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 let's
talk about needing more
space around our ankles,
our toes, our mouths,
and especially 
our ears;

--I liked this bit the most. it felt like swimming.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Writer
<3 thank you, G. the feeling itself feels a lot like floating too.
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BookWormMK Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's wonderful- very clean, even though it's so emotional.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Writer
thank you! <3
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BookWormMK Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome.
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Cold and icy at the end.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Writer
it's meant to be :hug:
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student General Artist

I love it!

And I love your titles so much too - makes me want to write title poems!

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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Writer
aw, I'd love to see, should you ever come up with one. <3
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you~
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roylapost Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
"the unobserved universe does not exist" - you see me, therefore I am .... thanks for that. But to see myself as others see me am I creating myself ... or perhaps re-creating myself. Oh, the possibilities.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student Writer
c: have you been watching my favourite TV show? :meow:
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roylapost Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Still LOST.

watching LOST not that I'M lost ... thought sometimes I feel a little .... Well you know what I mean.
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