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i. we dusted dreams off people like the first snowflakes of the season. you'd take one and rest it on the center of your tongue because you hated the taste of ice cream and wanted to reset what cold tasted like to you.
you taught me that the cold could be bitter, and so could people's dreams.

you drank out of out-of-order wells because you believed they still worked and that the government was keeping it all to itself.
i never realized how insane you made me before i wrote this all down.


ii.
i wished on the sun because i ran out of shooting stars.
and just to spite me, you began wishing on raindrops because you believed that they were so many, one of them was bound to remember you.
but we both ended up laughing hysterically with protruding knives on a bloodstained floor, didn't we?


iii.
i talked to clockwork towers and told them to lie because if they stopped for just a while, all the time in the world would seize.
one human, two humans, three and then four, all of them would reach to fix their own watches.
but no one would catch the frozen hands of the clock i betrayed; you taught me how to feel good about things like that.

you took naps on stratus clouds because you loved watching meteorologists get mini-heart attacks and laying there made you feel like Zeus. but you never noticed that when you felt like you were thundering, you weren't raining hard at all, and when you saw those same clouds bring a hailstorm, you never really snowed.


iv
. smirks broke the solitude and loneliness crept in; the thin line between them lay raped by the timidly hostile enemy they called you. that's what you were always good at; telling me i'm wrong, but wanderlust was the only color that looked good on me.
                                                              and i don't fucking share.


v. we dusted dreams off people like the first snowflakes of the season, before Christmas carols on Valentine's day seemed ironic to you.
Do me a favor, you whispered to my hair, brushed by your winter sea-breeze breath just as i was about to get up and leave. Tell me what the cold tastes like to you.
a smile tore my lips and opened my eyes to silence.

i walked on.
i work alone.

edit: made some slight changes.
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   Writer
your absolutely lovely work has been featured here: fav.me/d6g1s2z
thanks for sharing it with me :heart::heart:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Writer
ah, you're lovely. thank you. <3
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013   Writer
you're welcome lovely :rose:
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013   Writer
i walked on.
^
i literally just got chills right now. i'm not kidding. goosebumps everywhere.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student Writer
eee thank you so much! <3 <3
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   Writer
:love:
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BailanduSilueta Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
this, just as your work all is, is stunning. i love it. I love the unique style you have; the numbering and the lists, but the general flow of the writing is still impeccable. The themes and focuses are all so deep, and you write about it all so easily and make it so beautiful. I must say, I particularly like the first part of iii., because of the full identity you give the clocks. I think you did it absolutely flawlessly, and I read that one section over and over again, because it's so perfect.

As I say, and cannot stress enough, this is gorgeous, but I do have just -one- issue. I don't really like how you used the swear word in the second section of iii. Of course this is completely up to you, and honestly I don't have anything against swearing or anything lol, it's not like that, but I think with the brilliant innocence and beauty of this piece, the 'fucking' just seems too harsh and sticks out completely against the piece. Oddly, as I began to read about the clocks, my eye was drawn to the word, just because I didn't expect it to be there.

Apart from that, though, this piece is breathtaking, and simply flawless.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
you're far too kind to me, love. thank you so, so much. :heart:

yes, i see how that works! but what i was trying to say was that the point of the lists was to show how the narrator grew out of the spell her companion had put her under. she grew stronger and less needy and it showed when she "walked on". does that make sense? :/

oh love, thank you. :hug:
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BailanduSilueta Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
sort of, though i'm not entirely sure if we're talking across purposes? my critique was on the line 'I don't fucking share' xP pardon if i've just missed a trick xD

nnoo, your writing is just too beautiful.
you're very welcome!:huggle:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
oh yes, i know! i just meant she was standing up to him now and cursing instead of just being quiet and timid. :3

thank you so very much. :love:
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