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i. we dusted dreams off people like the first snowflakes of the season. you'd take one and rest it on the center of your tongue because you hated the taste of ice cream and wanted to reset what cold tasted like to you.
you taught me that the cold could be bitter, and so could people's dreams.

you drank out of out-of-order wells because you believed they still worked and that the government was keeping it all to itself.
i never realized how insane you made me before i wrote this all down.


ii.
i wished on the sun because i ran out of shooting stars.
and just to spite me, you began wishing on raindrops because you believed that they were so many, one of them was bound to remember you.
but we both ended up laughing hysterically with protruding knives on a bloodstained floor, didn't we?


iii.
i talked to clockwork towers and told them to lie because if they stopped for just a while, all the time in the world would seize.
one human, two humans, three and then four, all of them would reach to fix their own watches.
but no one would catch the frozen hands of the clock i betrayed; you taught me how to feel good about things like that.

you took naps on stratus clouds because you loved watching meteorologists get mini-heart attacks and laying there made you feel like Zeus. but you never noticed that when you felt like you were thundering, you weren't raining hard at all, and when you saw those same clouds bring a hailstorm, you never really snowed.


iv
. smirks broke the solitude and loneliness crept in; the thin line between them lay raped by the timidly hostile enemy they called you. that's what you were always good at; telling me i'm wrong, but wanderlust was the only color that looked good on me.
                                                              and i don't fucking share.


v. we dusted dreams off people like the first snowflakes of the season, before Christmas carols on Valentine's day seemed ironic to you.
Do me a favor, you whispered to my hair, brushed by your winter sea-breeze breath just as i was about to get up and leave. Tell me what the cold tastes like to you.
a smile tore my lips and opened my eyes to silence.

i walked on.
i work alone.

edit: made some slight changes.
reading found here: [link]
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   Writer
your absolutely lovely work has been featured here: fav.me/d6g1s2z
thanks for sharing it with me :heart::heart:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Writer
ah, you're lovely. thank you. <3
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013   Writer
you're welcome lovely :rose:
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013   Writer
i walked on.
^
i literally just got chills right now. i'm not kidding. goosebumps everywhere.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student Writer
eee thank you so much! <3 <3
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   Writer
:love:
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BailanduSilueta Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
this, just as your work all is, is stunning. i love it. I love the unique style you have; the numbering and the lists, but the general flow of the writing is still impeccable. The themes and focuses are all so deep, and you write about it all so easily and make it so beautiful. I must say, I particularly like the first part of iii., because of the full identity you give the clocks. I think you did it absolutely flawlessly, and I read that one section over and over again, because it's so perfect.

As I say, and cannot stress enough, this is gorgeous, but I do have just -one- issue. I don't really like how you used the swear word in the second section of iii. Of course this is completely up to you, and honestly I don't have anything against swearing or anything lol, it's not like that, but I think with the brilliant innocence and beauty of this piece, the 'fucking' just seems too harsh and sticks out completely against the piece. Oddly, as I began to read about the clocks, my eye was drawn to the word, just because I didn't expect it to be there.

Apart from that, though, this piece is breathtaking, and simply flawless.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
you're far too kind to me, love. thank you so, so much. :heart:

yes, i see how that works! but what i was trying to say was that the point of the lists was to show how the narrator grew out of the spell her companion had put her under. she grew stronger and less needy and it showed when she "walked on". does that make sense? :/

oh love, thank you. :hug:
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BailanduSilueta Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
sort of, though i'm not entirely sure if we're talking across purposes? my critique was on the line 'I don't fucking share' xP pardon if i've just missed a trick xD

nnoo, your writing is just too beautiful.
you're very welcome!:huggle:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
oh yes, i know! i just meant she was standing up to him now and cursing instead of just being quiet and timid. :3

thank you so very much. :love:
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BailanduSilueta Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
ah, right, i see now c: thankyou !
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BailanduSilueta Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
o: my apologies! I love all of iii., it's iv. that I posted the second para about, oopsie :3
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ObsessedNerdGirl Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how at the end you come back to, "We dusted dreams off people like the first snowflakes of the season" It just wraps everything up perfectly. I also love the line "the thin line between them lay raped" It is not often that we see someone take the cliché, about thin lines and crossing them, and really make it their own. The term "raped" really shows how brutal and messy the crossing was. Everything in this story is beautiful, like a controlled chaos. I just really love how you write, very unique. Good job.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
oh, that is such a brilliant compliment, thank you so much. :heart:
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C-A-Harland Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Student Writer
Beautifully written segments that form a many-layered and intriguing story. The descriptions you bring in are wonderful and I particularly love the opening paragraph and the line "wanted to reset what cold tasted like to you". I also think the "wishing on the sun" and "wishing on raindrops" are absolutely beautiful and evoke amazing imagery.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much! <3
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C-A-Harland Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome :)
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ApplauseJunkie Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's pieces like this that make me wish I knew what the words mean when you say them.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
:heart:
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selena-lenoir Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
Wow...this is simply magnificent. Very well done. Each section seemed to paint a picture in my head, and the emotion was quite strong. Just...wow!
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much, love.
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As a meteorologist, I hereby declare that whoever this "you" is referring to is a jerk for enjoying giving me mini-heart attacks.
:-P

But in all seriousness, this is really, really good. I think the only criticism I'd have is the line: "but we both ended up laughing hysterically with stabbed protruding knives jutting out of us on a bloodstained floor, didn't we?" particularly the "stabbed protruding knives jutting out of us" bit...the "stabbed", "protruding", and "jutting out of us" bits are all kind of redundant...I'd say one of them would suffice. Unless you were trying to drive the point home (hehe) via redundancy, in which case it worked.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
yes, this man is a jerk in all seriousness.

oh yes, i see what you mean. i was pretty sketchy about including this sentence but it was vent art, and then i realized that the point of vent art was to get a point across and not make something pretty. but now that you've pointed it out, i do want to fix it up. thank you so much, lovely.
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:iconarinadadragonspeaker:
You're welcome :heart: Vent art is fun, though. Most of my old work was vent art. And my most recent piece was sort of me venting on a friend's behalf, though in a more wistful, sad way than an angry way...not sure that counts as venting actually, haha. Oh well.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
it's beautiful in its own way, really. :heart:
and i think it qualifies as vent art!
i cleaned that sentence up, is it better?
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:iconarinadadragonspeaker:
Yes, definitely! :)
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jskullly Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
i need to read this a few times, and formulate a response.

i'd love to hear a reading of this, if that's anywhere online.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
i'm working on the reading as we speak.
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jskullly Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
yeeee!
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
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jskullly Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
i like your voice.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
why thank you.
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timeanchorage Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The language used in this is simply phenomenal.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! <3
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012
Oh god, this is so beautifully written. i wished on the sun because i ran out of shooting stars.
and just to spite me, you began wishing on raindrops because you believed that they were so many, one of them was bound to remember you.
:heart:

-squirms shyly- I have a Tumblr where I read some of my favorite lit pieces from around DA aloud, and... could I read this? You can hear it before I post it and I'll link back to your page. :) Here's the Tumblr, if you'd like to have a listen: [link]
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
these are absolutely beautiful. i'd be honored if you read this and linked back. thank you so much.
could you send me a link once you're done?
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Here it is: [link]

:heart:

If you like it, I'll post it. ^^
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Student Writer
i adore this. You may. Thank you so much @<3
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
It's posted. :heart: I'm so glad you like it. :huggle:
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silver-ships-fly Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wonderfully written! (:
It all came together so beautifully and I loved it;
the beginning, middle, and end!!
You have such lovely writing :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Everything you write makes me want to smile and cry, and also be envious of your talent. Beautiful job.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Student Writer
oh dear. thank you. it feels so...amazing knowing that it's touched someone's heart. thank you so much.
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IvoryAndRoseLeaves Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Student Artist
Also class, WATCHING!
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Student Writer
thanks for the watch, man. :manhug:
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
Can you give a Burgess smile before you leave?

you write in a swirl
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Student Writer
not leaving. seeing me smile?
might as well start waiting for a storm where i am.

why, thank you.
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
no not leaving but the smile is there just the same

why you're welcome
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
What an amazing story! I love how pronounced it is. It's so vital, and so concrete! I feel so much attitude in it, like knowing right where you stand before walking away. I loved reading it. Thank you for sharing these perfectly written words. I especially love the end, "tell me what cold tastes like to you," like a jest, like a test, to prove a point, and then it says the action in response, "a smile tore my lips and opened my eyes to silence. i walked on" >< :heart: :love:
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Student Writer
i suppose i can say that it took a while to get there. i am so, so glad you liked this.
thankyou<333
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
You're welcome! ^^ Thank you for sharing! =)
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