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i haven't felt smaller than this before
and it could be
because i don't breathe poetry in
and out -
in
and out,
in
and out -
i write it under my eyebrows
with the precision
of a drunk sniper
toasted into admission
with irony s-st-tutter-ering
down his throat.

you wouldn't take a damned bullet for me.

beautiful is a word kept
for the rise
and fall
of her tidal chest,
not my shallow breath,
not my sunset, heartfelt,
hollow silhouette.

i would have disappeared
between your accusing index and
neglected thumb -
rub me,

rub me?

rub her
rub her

don't you feel calmer?

no

i haven't felt smaller than this
before.

i haven't felt smaller than this before
and it could be
because you found a home between
her stroking index and
comforting thumb -
i haven't forgotten,
no, i still remember

now twenty two penumbrae in the past
didn't stop me
from settling
in one of several crevasses
at the bottom of your oceanic mind;
you may have forgotten,
and slept in
on the details,
but i haven't,
not yet,

not yet.

i haven't felt smaller than this before.
my first slam poem

--

i'm done.

reading done here.
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Personghost Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student Writer
Oh my this is incredible
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Student Writer
thank you! :blushes:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014   General Artist

hearing this poem pieced deep inside of me, dearest sister :heart:

i love you and am so so sooo very proud of you. :tighthug:

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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: thank you so much, love.
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dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014   Writer
I can't say anything complimentary that hasn't already been said.
I just wanted to thank you for writing this.
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: thank you.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
... This was definitely not something I'd have been comfortable reading... And now reading it makes me realize that the title's representing more than what meets the eye.

Its subtle (big "duh!" there) but its... I can't place my finger on it. I don't know, but it feels as if the person being conversed with is a pervert of sorts... the way it changed tones, and the last stanza in particular... Really wasn't expecting that stanza honestly... Having said that... I wasn't expecting the "don't you feel calmer" portion either... that was just... (shudders) anyway... This was outside my comfort zone, and I'll honestly admit, I wasn't expecting myself to feel... jittery and anxious after reading this...

Its not a bad sign, again I'll just have to compliment you for doing something I would have expected `KathrynODriscoll to do... Involuntarily make me feel insecure with your words... And this work definitely made me insecure... That's my response honestly, I don't mean anything disrespectful to the poem in any way...
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
...yeah... my poetry has gotten pretty dark as of late. and yes! you caught it.

yeah, it's an abuse victim talking basically (just a hint of the main idea, I gave nothing away) I don't know why I feel the need to take the jitteriness as a compliment. I could only dream of causing a reaction like that. though I'm sorry you felt uncomfortable reading it :(

oh no, not at all. <3 thank you! :heart:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It definitely shows... Man, I haven't felt so scared since checking out the "Alice in Fuckland" folder of yours... speaking of which, I just can't remember that poem of yours... (argh) it had the last line "you will always be home", was divided into nine portions, had the phrase "Alice in fuckland" very prominent in it, and I wrote a comment on it... argh...

Anyway... the jitterness... inasmuch as its a bad thing to say... should be taken as a compliment. I know its wrong, but on such a topic... there's no other response that can be made... its too dark, and its too stark, to be taken lightly...

Nah I'm... I'll manage... (smile) come on, Kath had scary poems (and we both know that), so frankly, revisiting that portion of life is definitely something to remind me that I am indeed... human...
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Student Writer
ah, you shouldn't look there. seriously. it's probably in storage since I couldn't find it. but I think I know which one you're talking about.

yes, I see what you mean. we all are :hug:
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